T2+Narrative

__Monday 4th July 2011__ [|Narrative Writing]

__Tuesday 28 June 2011__

**Comment: Good story Morgan, it flows well and follows the structure of introduction, building suspence, climax and resolution. I'm glad the sheep were all back at the end.**

**(Working towards Level 4)** **Next Steps - Target** **1. Develop the events selecting good descriptive words that paint a picture in the readers head (e.g. cracking sound = log, what log, describe it)** **2. Correctly use punctuation and paragraphing with dialogue**

It was a cold windy night, out on Happy valley farm. It was coming to seven at night, and all I could hear from in the kitchen was Mr and Mrs Gorman arguing over there fancy dinner they where going to at the town hall. “What if it snows when we are out and the sheep don’t get put in their stables” Mr Gorman said worrying. Answering back “Well we will get the boys to do it then”Mrs gorman replied. Yelling up the stairs I hear Mrs Gorman, “John, Ace and Charlie please come down here” “ What is it”? Asked Ace “ If it starts to snow can you please put the sheep into the shelter” “ yes we can do that, now be on your way to the dinner” Ace replied. A few minutes later I saw Mr and Mrs Gorman driving down the road, picking up dirt and stones as they went in the old, pick-up truck.

Sitting in the lounge watching T.V and out of the corner of my eye I could see, Olivia and Charlie trying to dance. Which is a funny sight to watch. Out of the window I gazed then it started to snow. “ Hay boys you should bring the sheep in it is starting to snow, and us girls wont to help as well so we are coming with you” I said with a exiting look on my face. Rushing to get their coats and scarves, they were out the door with, Tip and Tag close behind, wagging their tails in happiness.

Tip and Tag running from left to right herding the sheep into big lots of wight wool. “ Tip right, Tag left” John was commanding the dogs. It took about a hour to get the sheep into the shelter, when the snow was two inches thick. I closed the gate and we started to walk back into the house, talking as loud as we can about how fun herding the sheep was.

Tiered and half asleep Olivia and I could hear Mrs Gorman crying down in the kitchen, walking down the stairs “ Whats the wrong”? I wondered “ Oh I thought you all were asleep, but all the sheep are gone” “ But how I closed the gate” “ did you lock it” ? “ whoops, no” I said with sorrow Running outside with the boys following me wondering whats going on. The dogs following me. Tip clawing at my jeans wanted me to follow him.

Running after Tip I could feel the snowflakes hitting my face as I went through the snow. We reach a fence and Tip was ordering us to follow him through the fence. Gathering up my courage, I followed Tip through the fence and down this hill to a drop into a gorge that spread from ages each side. “There’s a log that I can climb over to the other side” I yelled back to the others “No don’t cross the log you might fall” replied Ash I wasn’t listening to him so I kept on going on to the log. I was half way when I herd this cracking sound and the next thing I knew was that I was in the middle of ten sheep.

Calling back to the others to say that I have found the sheep. “Go find Mr Gorman Ash and Charlie” “ I’m coming down to Rosa” Said John as he fell the same way I did. Back at the house was searching franticly to find Mr Gorman. They found him shutting the gate on the sheep. “ Rosa and John have found the sheep” “Where”? “ in the gorge” John said trying to catch his breathe from running so far to find Mr Gorman. “ Well then, Ash get that ladder, Charlie get that spade and olivia get that feed” Mr Gorman asked rushed “ Now show the ways boys” It only took a few seconds for then to get down to where I was with the sheep and John.

With the ladder being lowered to where I was, so I could get out. But before I could climb I herd Mr Gorman say “ Rosa can you walk that way and yell when it stops please” “sure can once I get though all these sheep” Once I was past all the sheep I could see the end, it took a few more meters till I reached It and then I just yelled at the top of my lungs. “FOUND IT ” Next thing I new that Mr Gorman was making some steps down to the sheep and telling Olivia “ Put the feed on each step I make so that the sheep can follow it up the stairs to safety” And Olivia did just that.

Few seconds went by till the oldest sheep started up the dirt steps, then all the others followed up till they were at safety. I started up the ladder as the last sheep was walking up the stairs, John followed close behind me. Shivering from the cold, Charlie offered to give me his jacket. Refusing the jacket from him, I started up the hill back to the house.

When I walked into the house, I could smell freshly baked cookies and hot chocolate. I scoffed down two or more cookies and three classes of hot chocolate. “I’m going to bed” I said with a yawn “ I will come with you” said Olivia following behind up the stairs “ See you all tomorrow, for another adventure” The next day was a real adventure, but that is a different story.

__Monday 28 June 2011__

It was a cold windy night, out on Happy valley farm. It was coming to seven at night, and all I could hear from in the kitchen was Mr and Mrs Gorman arguing over there fancy dinner they where going to at the town hall. “What if it snows when we are out and the sheep don’t get put in their stables” Mr Gorman said worrying. Answering back Mrs gorman said, “Well we will get the boys to do it then”

Yelling up the stairs I hear Mrs Gorman yell, “John, Ace and Charlie please come down here” “ What is it”? Asked Ace “ If it starts to snow can you please put the sheep into the shelter” “ yes we can do that, now be on your way to the dinner” Ace replied. A few minutes later I saw Mr and Mrs Gorman driving down the road, picking up dirt and stones as they went in the old, pick-up truck.

Sitting in the lounge watching T.V and out of the corner of my eye I could see, Olivia and Charlie trying to dance. Which is a funny sight to watch. Out of the window I gazed then it started to snow. “ Hay boys you should bring the sheep in it is starting to snow, and us girls wont to help as well so we are coming with you” I said with a exiting look on my face. Rushing to get their coats and scarves, they were out the door with, Tip and Tag close behind, wagging their tails in happiness.

Tip and Tag running from left to right herding the sheep into big lots of wight wool. “ Tip right, Tag left” John was commanding the dogs. It took about a hour to get the sheep into the shelter, when the snow was two inches thick. I closed the gate and we started to walk back into the house, talking as loud as we can about how fun herding the sheep was.

Tiered and half asleep Olivia and I could hear Mrs Gorman crying down in the kitchen, walking down the stairs “ Whats the wrong”? I wondered “ Oh I thought you all were asleep, but all the sheep are gone” “ But how I closed the gate” “ did you lock it” ? “ whoops, no” I said with sorrow Running outside with the boys following me wondering whats going on. The dogs following me. Tip clawing at my jeans wanted me to follow him.

Running after Tip I could feel the snowflakes hitting my face as I went through the snow. We reach a fence and Tip was ordering us to follow him through the fence. Gathering up my courage, I followed Tip through the fence and down this hill to a drop into a gorge that spread from ages each side. “There’s a log that I can climb over to the other side” I yelled back to the others “No don’t cross the log you might fall” replied Ash I wasn’t listening to him so I kept on going on to the log. I was half way when I herd this cracking sound and the next thing I knew was that I was in the middle of ten sheep.

Calling back to the others to say that I have found the sheep. “Go find Mr Gorman Ash and Charlie” “ I’m coming down to Rosa” Said John as he fell the same way I did. Back at the house was searching franticly to find Mr Gorman. They found him shutting the gate on the sheep. “ Rosa and John have found the sheep” “Where”? “ in the gorge” John said trying to catch his breathe from running so far to find Mr Gorman. “ Well then, Ash get that ladder, Charlie get that spade and olivia get that feed” Mr Gorman asked rushed “ Now show the ways boys” It only took a few seconds for then to get down to where I was with the sheep and John.

With the ladder being lowered to where I was, so I could get out. But before I could climb I herd Mr Gorman say “ Rosa can you walk that way and yell when it stops please” “sure can once I get though all these sheep” Once I was past all the sheep I could see the end, it took a few more meters till I reached It and then I just yelled at the top of my lungs. “FOUND IT ” Next thing I new that Mr Gorman was making some steps down to the sheep and telling Olivia “ Put the feed on each step I make so that the sheep can follow it up the stairs to safety” And Olivia did just that.

__Friday 24 June 2011__

It was a cold windy night, out on Happy valley farm. It was coming to seven at night, and all I could hear from in the kitchen was Mr and Mrs Gorman arguing over there fancy dinner they where going to at the town hall. “What if it snows when we are out and the sheep don’t get put in their stables” Mr Gorman said worrying. Answering back Mrs gorman said, “Well we will get the boys to do it then”

Yelling up the stairs I hear Mrs Gorman yell, “John, Ace and Charlie please come down here” “ What is it”? Asked Ace “ If it starts to snow can you please put the sheep into the shelter” “ yes we can do that, now be on your way to the dinner” Ace replied. A few minutes later I saw Mr and Mrs Gorman driving down the road, picking up dirt and stones as they went in the old, pick-up truck.

Sitting in the lounge watching T.V and out of the corner of my eye I could see, Olivia and Charlie trying to dance. Which is a funny sight to watch. Out of the window I gazed then it started to snow. “ Hay boys you should bring the sheep in it is starting to snow, and us girls wont to help as well so we are coming with you” I said with a exiting look on my face. Rushing to get their coats and scarves, they were out the door with, Tip and Tag close behind, wagging their tails in happiness.

Tip and Tag running from left to right herding the sheep into big lots of wight wool. “ Tip right, Tag left” John was commanding the dogs. It took about a hour to get the sheep into the shelter, when the snow was two inches thick. I closed the gate and we started to walk back into the house, talking as loud as we can about how fun herding the sheep was.

Tiered and half asleep Olivia and I could hear Mrs Gorman crying down in the kitchen, walking down the stairs “ Whats the wrong”? I wondered “ Oh I thought you all were asleep, but all the sheep are gone” “ But how I closed the gate” “ did you lock it” ? “ whoops, no” I said with sorrow Running outside with the boys following me wondering whats going on. The dogs following me. Tip clawing at my jeans wanted me to follow him.

Running after Tip I could feel the snowflakes hitting my face as I went through the snow. We reach a fence and Tip was ordering us to follow him through the fence. Gathering up my courage, I followed Tip through the fence and down this hill to a drop into a gorge that spread from ages each side. “There’s a log that I can climb over to the other side” I yelled back to the others “No don’t cross the log you might fall” replied Ash I wasn’t listening to him so I kept on going on to the log. I was half way when I herd this cracking sound and the next thing I knew was that I was in the middle of ten sheep.

Calling back to the others to say that I have found the sheep. “Go find Mr Gorman Ash and Charlie” “ I’m coming down to Rosa” Said John as he fell the same way I did. Back at the house was searching franticly to find Mr Gorman. They found him shutting the gate on the sheep. “ Rosa and John have found the sheep” “Where”? “ in the gorge” John said trying to catch his breathe from running so far to find Mr Gorman. “ Well then, Ash get that ladder, Charlie get that spade and olivia get that feed” Mr Gorman asked rushed “ Now show the ways boys”

__Friday 11 June__ __Power__

Power wears a t-shirt with the superman sign walking down the path like he owns the place, his head held high looking over all the people that walk past, eyes shining in the sun shine with a smile from cheek to cheek, bossing people around was his thing to do to make him think he had more power than others that walked past walking along side of power is wisdom, following every move Power lived in a house that was covered in pictures of his heros